Friday, 9 September 2011

Lunch Date

I've been invited to a naughty lunch date by romance author Kiru Taye*. How could I possibly refuse? Would you?

 Here's my story in verse:

Lunch Date

tyre in a tale truer than reality
                      spanner in the works
                             jack up the rarity
biceps familiar
hug an understatement
the heat of her garment
Victoria has a secret
                           how long she can keep; anyone’s bet
cloud over emotion, incensed larva in white lace halos
                 eyelashes flutter, house doubt and soliloquy
                                               check out the queen bee
                probing mister’s attempts at tempting honey

©Adura Ojo – September 9, 2011


*Written this evening, for the Romantic Friday Writers "Lunch Date"Challenge.


The Fast Verse Series tag is one that indicates poems I've written in a day, usually within an hour or two.

26 comments :

  1. This is fabulous! I love the play on words. Very well done. :)

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  2. This is such a fun piece to read. Hot and passionate, yet not smutty, and so light and playful. Like, like, like. :-)

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  3. *whispering*...please can you decode it for me ma'am?....i understand it ought to be 'naughty'..but am kind of lost...*scratches head*..weldone.

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  4. I'm not a genius at deconstructing poems but I understand enough to like this. Great play on words. You're teasing us. Thanks so much for adding your talent to the RFWer pool. I hope, hope, hope we hear more of you!

    Denise

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  5. i'm usually not a fan of poems but this was real cute..love it!

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  6. This raises some interesting images in my mind. I'm useless at poetry so can even begin to offer you anything sensible by way of a comment. :)

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  7. Great...beautiful piece as always.

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  8. Hi, and welcome to RFW.

    This is such a fun piece, and I dare not mention the images that come to mind! ;)

    best
    F

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  9. Nice and fun poem that fits the theme and Kiru's story perfectly!
    Well done.
    Best wishes,
    Anna
    Anna's RFW No. 18 'Lunch Date'

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  10. Oooooh,speak english Naijalines!!!Too tired to decrypyt!!!

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  11. Nice PUN.... Wish I can write these rhymes too ;)

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  12. Great play on words Adura.

    I got lost after Uncle Jack heated up Aunty Victoria's secret..now my naughty mind is awondering :D

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  13. lol. I love the puns in this. Please do share more poetry :)

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  14. Save my holy mind o! hahah
    I think I caught some things sha. lol

    - LDP

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  15. @ Beverley Diehl
    Thank you so much for being here. It's a lovely feeling to 'hear' and read your comments. What you like about my poem is what I like too:-) Please visit again.

    @ 9jaFOODie
    Love you too babe!

    @ Onyeka_o
    Cheers:-)

    @ Ibhade
    Follow the honey, sista. You feeling me now? lol.

    @ilola
    Ah, se onyibo po ninu eleyi sha? lol.

    @ L'Aussie
    Really appreciate your feedback. Particularly as I'm trying to reach those who would not usually read or deconstruct poetry. I hope to pop round RFW more often and look forward to doing more challenges. It's been fun doing this. I hope more bloggers join in too.

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  16. @ Kitkat
    Your comment kind of points me in the direction of what works with this poem. I hope to write more poems that non-fans like you can appreciate. So I would like to know what you really liked about it. Thanks:-)

    @ J.L. Campbell
    You're welcome to my blog. 'Interesting images' is great, not useless at all! That would do for me:-) Please come visit again.

    @ Lara
    Thanks dearie, as always. Have a lovely week.

    @ Francine Howarth
    I shouldn't say a penny for your thoughts then!;)
    You're welcome anytime and I hope you'll pop in again sometime soon.

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  17. @ Anna
    Kiru's story set the scene for sure. Thanks for being here. I look forward to reading your piece.

    @ T.Notes
    Hey bro, tell me in your own language what it sounds like;)

    @ enybees-hub
    Thanks sista. I think puns appeal to that naughty playful side we all have. It just needs a little teasing out;)

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  18. @ Ginger
    LOL @ Aunty Victoria and Uncle Jack. Now you've got my mind wandering...hmmm...LOL!

    @ Etoile Oye
    Thanks, dear.
    I look forward to sharing more:D

    @ LDP
    LOL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    You're too funny!
    What did you catch o?
    It's Sunday, LDP!
    I will not be held responsible for the corruption of morals today of all days;););)
    Have a great week!

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  19. Enjoyed the play on words and the humour of this :O)

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  20. I'm a big fan of good poems and this surely ranks top there. However, any chance you could deconstruct the secondhalf of it? :)

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  21. An eloquently worded piece. Beautiful. ~MsQ

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  22. @ Madeline
    Yours was cool too:)

    @ Naija4life
    Oh thank you sir!
    That 2nd half, hmmm...what do you think?;)

    @ Ms Queenly
    Graciously received, your highness:D

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