Friday, 27 January 2012

Auto Tango


If there was only one dance
The chance of a lifetime
No dress rehearsal
Only one show
in the world
of a
stage
Would you jive or tango with
the wittiest monkey
or orang-utan
Dream safari
While waiting
for the
Knight
Hold out for prince Charming, or…
Just dance as long as the
night is young and the
knight is taking
time you may
not have
So…
Bumps and smooth rides, skating on
thin ice. Dance. Trip. Step up!
Ha! Flat on your face
You fell - so what!
Shimmy out  
a new
you

©Adura Ojo 27 January, 2012

Posted for Romantic Friday Writers prompt: Learning to Dance When It's Over. To read more posts on the prompt by other writers, click here. Shared with Gooseberry Garden  and Poetry Pantry

42 comments :

  1. very different style of writing....cool. Enjoyed the poem, very positive.

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    1. Thanks, Janu.
      Nice to see you here.

      "Auto Tango" is probably one of the most technically difficult poems I've ever written. Each stanza is linked - starts with seven syllables which reduces until it becomes one and then it starts with seven all over again and repeats the process until one word at the end of the last stanza.

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  2. Adura, how I've missed your spunky poetics! Love this. You swung your reader on a roundabout - nice little seague at the beginning, then the unusual imagery of the monkey, then along comes Prince Charming, or does he? The ending was wonderfully witty. Love the one word sentences. Great fun for this prompt!

    Denise

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    1. Hi Denise,
      I've missed being at RFW too:)
      Yes, there are deeper meanings. Essentially, life is like a dance where we trip and fall and pull ourselves back up again. Prince Charming may take his time, but we should have fun and love ourselves while waiting or kissing the frogs, lol. Fun to write but also difficult as I said in my earlier comment to Janu.

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  3. Vividly exciting journey. Loved the word usage; hey flowed and intrigued. This was fun.

    .......dhole

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  4. Very nice. I like the rhythm and imagery.

    Linda

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  5. Dear Adura,
    Thank you for your kind words about my writing and my RFW-post. I had written a first draft a week ago, but threw it away at the last moment and wrote this one and posted it instead. I needed a tighter connection to music and dance.

    You are are 'First Commenter' on that post and get an extra link.

    Your poem is fun and meets the challenge perfectly. Love the last lines about falling on one's face; that wraps it up well. 'Shimmy out' is also such a cool expression!

    Best wishes,
    Anna

    For the benefit of other readers:
    Anna's The Last Dance - RFW challenge No.30

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    1. Thanks, Anna for the extra link.
      I'm glad you posted your entry for this week's challenge - it's one of my favourites from you. I can definitely see a progression in your writing.

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  6. Fabulous piece as always. Picking up when you've fallen is always tough. It's part of the human survival instincts. But I agree, why wait when you can dance the night away. :)

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    1. Lol. Kiru, are you sure about dancing the night away?

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  7. I love this poem. It's fun and uplifting. I feel like dancing despite it all

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    1. Nice to see you here again, Kitten. Dance despite it all, girl. You know how important that is:)

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  8. This is fantastic - loved it and a great take on the prompt
    Lx

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    1. Thanks for the lovely feedback, Laura. Loved yours too:D

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  9. Yes, just shimmy away and do the jive or grind ~

    Happy week to you ~

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    1. Hmmm....Heaven! Jive, I might. Grind, I might not get up again. Then I'll have a lot of explaining to do. Lol.

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  10. glad to see you back...
    amazing write.

    smooth sailings.

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    1. Thanks, Taylor. Glad to see you here too.

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  11. Adura, I am so glad to see you again! Missed your voice. Well, if there were only one dance, I'd dance whatever music played. Actually in life, I think that is what I must do anyway. I find a way to dance to the music: waltz, tango, shimmy. And, if I fall, I find a way to pick myself up and continue dancing. That's life. I liked your poem very much and thank you for visiting my blog too.

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    1. Thank you, Mary. It sure feels nice to be missed. I've missed your voice too.

      Like you said, that's life. The show must go on - it will do so with or without us. So we do our best to pick ourselves up and continue dancing.

      I look forward to reading you as always.

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  12. the dance of life...i think the art is to dance to whatever the music plays..just as good as we can...and when we fall, get up again and dance on..
    i like how you shaped the poem and i love the questions, that give room for the reader to think what they would do...clever and wise write adura

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    1. Hi Claudia. I guess people react differently to situations and we all find our own way in the end. Your feedback means a lot.

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  13. I like the way your stanzas dance with the poem.

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    1. Ha-ha, I'm glad you got that:)
      Welcome to my blog, Booguloo.

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  14. fun, cute, interesting, best preferred the metaphors with safari and knight, king etc. brings an african essence to the piece!

    happy gooseberry day! :)

    http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2012/01/29/the-dark-side-of-the-moon/

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    1. Happy gooseberry, Lynnaima.
      Imagery is so important. I really can't write without it. It starts with images and references, and then the words come.

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  15. Hello Adura.
    So nice to see you back at RFW.

    I love to dance. I'm always singing & dancing as I get ready for work in the mornings & then when I come home at night. My wife just looks & me & shakes her head as if to say I'm mad! LOL

    This is such fun & also serious. Life is indeed a journey filled with many experiences...some good & others not so. I like how you used this to express the many twists & turns of life.
    Very well done!
    Thanks for sharing. I appreciate your visit/comments too.

    Like A Harlot

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    1. Hi Andy
      That kind of madness we can all do well to have, lol.
      Thanks for your lovely comments. It's always a pleasure to be at yours.

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  16. tango is cool,
    keep it coming....

    fantastic entry.

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    1. Cheers, Summer Rain. Yours was a delight too.

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  17. This is an important piece for me. Thank you for sharing it! Hits me where I live as of now. Tomorrow I may have moved :)

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    1. Hey Wine and Words,
      Cryptic but I'm feeling your vibe:)

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  18. I love the dancing feel to this... and strong message to enjoy life.

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    1. That's it, Laura. We might as well make the most of it. There's no dress rehearsal.

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  19. Hi Adura. Back for the second read. This still hits me! Not being a poet I need to read it through several times and now I can see the cleverness of your craft. It's also a shape poem because of your use of seven words reducing to one. I like to think the shape is the skirt the dancer's wearing.

    Love it.

    Denise

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    1. Wow, Denise. Seeing it through your eyes is invigorating. Yes it is a shape poem and everything you said was spot on. You say it so well. Thank you!

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  20. "You fell- so what!" Great attitude to have as long as one gets back up.

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    1. Ain't that the truth, Missy. It sure is. Getting back up is so necessary.

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  21. Hi Adura. You haven't yet been back to RFW. There is a prize for you with this poem! Congrats!

    Denise

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  22. Hi Denise,
    I'm featured writer, yay!!!
    I'm chuffed to bits.
    Thank you so much.
    Sorry it took a while to catch up online, due to work commitments.

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