Saturday, 11 February 2012

The Long Cool Aphrodisiac



For H.


They sipped latte as they sat in the cafe laughing and turning the page over years gone by. The sun reflected shadows of a silver whirlpool in his honey coloured eyes. Lara knew how much she’d wanted to immerse herself in the depth of them. She'd dreamed of it so often that she knew every inch of the roll of film by heart.

“Do you remember how we raved about John Travolta and Olivia Newton-John in Grease, and Michael Jackson in Thriller?” Tony’s eyes twinkled as he smiled at her.

How could she forget? She remembered what happened between them, her fondness tainted with regret. They were in the same class in a boys’ school that admitted girls into sixth form. Everyone wanted Tony as class captain - so he was. Tony was also captain of the school football team. She felt that he liked her but she was not sure if he liked her like that.  The next two years after they left school convinced her it was more than like. They wrote back and forth every fortnight. Her heart beat faster after reading his letters and he sent photos which she pinned on her bedroom wall. Then Tony wrote to say he was coming to see her. His university football team was playing a friendly match with hers. There was only one problem. She had a boyfriend. When they were in sixth form Tony had a girlfriend. It seemed fate plotted against them a second time.  

Tony came. They spent the day walking, talking and eating ice cream. She wore beautiful summery yellow shorts he could not take his eyes off. There was a moment when Tony held her close and she’d wanted him to kiss her. Someone called out in the corridor of the student hall where Tony was staying. Startled, they came apart and it was time to leave. That was the last time she saw him.  

Lara couldn’t believe the self assured middle aged man looking into her eyes was her shy guy. The one whose actions spoke louder than any words he uttered two decades ago. Time had not changed Tony much on the outside but his confidence seduced her like the cool aphrodisiac of a long awaited kiss.

©Adura Ojo, February 11, 2012




Word count: 381. Posted for Romantic Friday Writers Prompt: The Long, Cool Aphrodisiac.

28 comments :

  1. This is lovely, and a fantastic fit to the theme. And now I want to know what happens next :)
    Lx

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    1. Hi Laura,

      Thanks. I'd like to know what happens next too:)

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  3. saturday, February 11th, 2012

    Dear Adura,

    Your characters are likeable and your story fits the theme perfectly.
    You make the reader feel with them and wish them well.

    Bravo!

    Best wishes,
    Anna
    'To Paul and Julia' Anna's RFW challenge No.31

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    1. Anna, it's always a delight to hear from you.
      'Glad you enjoyed reading.

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  4. Adura, after I got over my shock of not seeing a poem I got right into your narrative. Your characters are very believable and I wonder how common a story such as this is in real life. I love the nostalgic look into the past era. Oh, those high school sweethearts!

    You are a very talented writer to be able to go between genres like this.

    Denise

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    1. Hi Denise,

      Thank you so much.

      I'm shocked when I switch lanes too. I never know when It's going to happen. I guess that's part of the fun. Just like the first time it happened, prose popped into my head this time too. I'd imagine it happens in real life but may not always have a romantic ending. Inspiration for the story actually comes from my real life experience of a crush when I was in high school. So the nostalgic bits of the story are to a large extent real, including the exchange of letters etc. But the sitting in the cafe bit has not happened (yet). My partner must not read this! LOL.

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    2. Just to say that the exchange of letters happened just after we left high school - for a couple of years. (In case anyone is wondering). One never knows who is reading! Lol.

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    3. Ooh, careful here Adura...Hate to see any trouble caused by a RFWer post, lol! D.

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    4. Oh, and why isn't anyone commenting about the gorgeous coffee art? I want one of those! D.

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    5. Would not like to see any trouble brewing either, LOL.

      Glad you like the coffee art, Denise. I want one too! Latte like that is an aphrodisiac :D

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  5. I too love the nostalgic feel to this. Memories of loss and regret can kindle a renewed love under the right circumstances. This is definitely the circumstance.

    Nicely written Adura.

    ......dhole

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    1. A renewed love can certainly blossom under the right circumstances. Glad you enjoyed reading, Donna. Thanks:)

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  6. I love stories full of youthful nostalgia and this had it in bounds. I travelled back in time with Lara as if I was reliving her life. You've worked the theme well. Well done, Adura. :)

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    1. Hey Kiru,
      Glad you could relate to Lara.
      Like I said in my earlier reply to Denise, experience was my best teacher on this one;)

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  7. Good romantic story with nostalgia. Nice little twist at the end.

    One typo - 3rd para. 3rd sentence: from should be form
    The second to last sentence could be a little clearer--Laura couldn't believe the self-assured, middle-aged man looking into her eyes was that same shy guy whose actions two decades ago spoke louder...

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    1. Hi Scheherazade,
      You know...I've been trying to kick my habit of correcting errors after posting. But I think I might just follow your lead this time:) Thanks for pointing out the error in the 3rd para. I didn't see that. I did notice the awkwardness of the last long sentence you pointed out.

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    2. Just to say the long sentence has been amended and it reads better now:)

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  8. My dear Adura,
    Poetry or prose...you never disappoint me. Now you know anytime chocolate is involved, things can get out of hand! LOL
    Very well told, vivid characters & scenery. As poets & writers, we may not realize it at the time, but upon reflection, there's always so much of ourselves in our writings.
    Very nicely penned & quite fitting for this week.
    Thanks for sharing.

    Love has Seeped Into My Heart

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    1. Andy my Friend! Chocolate...*(in best shakespearian voice)* I have not a clue what you're talking about;)

      Yes, our writing is usually a reflection of ourselves or what we think of others.

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  9. Adura, I love the idea of brooding over a latte pondering the romance that might have been...

    BTW I hope you don't mind my asking Is there anyway I could persuade you to change the black background/ white writing as this makes my eyes go crazy! I tend to avoid blogs with this set up because of potential migraines. x

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    1. Thanks, Madeleine.

      I'm working on changing the background. I think it's time for a new look:)

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  10. I love that last line. I can feel the undercurrent of a love affair on the verge of breaking free.
    Beautifully written.

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    1. Thanks, Kitten.
      I changed the wording in the last line so I'm glad for the feedback. Much Appreciated:)

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  11. I like this. A reflection of awkward moments coming full turn into adulthood. I hope they get together.
    Nancy

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    1. Be careful what you wish for, Nancy;);)
      Like your story, this one is also autobiographical. Not sure my partner would like that particular ending, lol.

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  12. I would love something like this to happen to me...so romantic.

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