Sunday, 1 April 2012

Aina


She gathers leaves for moin moin
Emotions boil; simmering anchovies
Soul on the edge of a quiet storm

Right hand curls into a fist
Hug-me-not basket of ills
Shield away from prying eels

Eyes teach her destiny
Spill angst on to her knee
Spell despair in her name


©Adura Ojo - April 1, 2012


images: Wikipedia


Posted for NaPoWriMo 2012, Poetry Jam: Another point of View - Strange Gods, Poetry Pantry #95

In Yoruba culture, some names given to babies tell a story about events before and during their birth. That name follows the child through life and their journey of fate. Aina was so named because she was born with the umbilical cord round her neck.

24 comments :

  1. What a powerful write, filled with emotion. I will try to follow your poems throughout the month. You say much with well chosen words. Good luck on NaPoWriMo!

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    1. Thanks, Mary. Good luck too. So glad you're doing NaPoWrimo:)

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  2. Adura, as always, a poem that rocks! Every line tingles, especially the last line - Spell despair in her name.

    I'm not sure if this is supposed to be an A-Z post too. If it is you'd better make it clear or A-Zers won't stop to read if you aren't displaying the A-Z badge etc. Just saying as there's nothing here to say it's for A-Z, just NaPoWriMo. (Hope this is helpful).

    Thanks for commenting on both my A-Z posts. You rock!

    I emailed you to tell you I didn't get your email! Will you resend?

    Denise

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    1. Hi Denise, many thanks for your lovely feedback:)

      I decided to drop out of the A-Z challenge. Couldn't relate to many posts of bloggers doing the challenge, and to trawl through so many would take time that I don't have. I'll continue to comment on yours of course. For the April challenge I'll do NaPoWrimO and some prompts from several online poets' communities.

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    2. I'll resend the email, wonder what happened to that one. I suppose it's an opportunity for me to beef up the one I sent originally - I did think (on reflection after sending) that my response to questions was a bit scanty on details.

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  3. Hi Aduro,

    thank you for dropping by my cobwebby corner and for the lovely comment. What a tightly coiled poem this is. I particularly love the line '...hug-me-not basket of ills...'. Well done.

    Jen

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  4. Thanks Jennifer. Your corner is not cobwebby at all.

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  5. The last stanza really brings it home. Can feel the emotion, at her fate but unwillingness to comfrom to it. Nicely done!

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    1. Wow, Pat! That's all I'm saying:)

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  7. Adura Ojo,

    This is going to be fun. More poems coming all April... I anticipate, I anticipate. This is absolutely thick, like the emotions about to spill off Aina's heel.

    Great job!

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    1. Hey NakedSha,

      How lovely to see you here:D
      A fun one tonight. I'll do my best to keep 'em coming!

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  8. ooo this is good...really like...

    Soul on the edge of a quiet storm

    and that whole last stanza...

    very cool

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    1. Cheers, Brian.
      Still deciding whether to join the party?;)

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  9. A wonderful write - your words are beautiful.

    Anna :o]

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  10. I have to echo so many of the others, that last stanza is brilliant, just perfect. Really enjoyed this.

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    1. Thanks, Mary M.
      Glad you enjoyed it. I'm still fine tuning my poetic voice, I think. Quite a few of them to deal with, still.

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  11. Have to add here, so glad you linked this to Poetry Jam. It does indeed fit the prompt!!

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    1. Oh, cheers Mary. You and I do seem to read from the same page, most of the time, it seems:)

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  12. I like this very much, the story of Aina and her destiny-filled beginnings. Good to see you at Poetry Jam!

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    1. Thanks for the warm welcome, Peggy. I hope to visit PJ again, soon. Glad you loved Aina's story.

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  13. interesting read after such a very long silence.Good work

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    1. O se, ore mi. Didn't mean to be silent, just busy with work. Hope you're good?

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