Saturday, 10 March 2012

I Love You Because...

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if I didn't love you
Where would I be
Would I be happy in the sea
swim aimlessly, endlessly 
float on a waterbed of fantasies
          fly up your tempting tree   
                   as a bat in daylight 
         blinded by your spotlight
                                        on me
                                         if I didn't love you
                                              what would I be
                         would I be that young woman
who saw an angel and didn't quite get the point
I love you because
          you taught me
the greatest love of all
it took a man like you
to know what not to love
I had to love you to find
what it took to love me

©Adura Ojo - March 9, 2012

Guys, I've had a crazy week like you wouldn't believe. It's good to come here to unwind. Hope you enjoyed reading my little offering for Romantic Friday Writers. This week, the prompt is I Love You Because... For some beautiful writing, please read and/or join us below.





35 comments :

  1. This should be on a Valentines day or anniversary card. It melted my heart.

    ......dhole

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  2. Fun poem, Adura.
    Very sweet.
    Hope the man who receives this lovely poem really deserves it!
    Best wishes,
    Anna
    Anna's RFWers Challenge No.33 'I love you because...'

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    1. Anna, when I first read your comment - I laughed (given the deeper interpretation to it). Let's just say it is well deserved, all round.

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  3. This is adorable Adura. Deeper than it looks at first reading. Love the water imagery then the bat in the spotlight, but most of all I love the last line.

    I hope your crazy week was all good.

    Denise

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    1. Thanks, Denise. You're definitely on to something here... regarding there being more to the poem than first meets the eye;)

      My crazy week was exhausting. I'm recovering now, thanks:D

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  4. Very nice...I like that love can make us realize how we can love ~

    I like your last two lines best ~

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    1. Thanks, Heaven.

      Real love is the best teacher, I agree.

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  5. What a beautifully sensitive and love-filled poem!

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    1. Thanks, Mary. I hope it is in so many ways.

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  6. Hi Adura
    You did a great job. I know how difficult it is to pull something together when life is making you crazy.

    I especially love these two lines:
    Float on a waterbed of fantasies
    Fly up your tempting tree
    as a bat in daylight
    blinded by your spotlight
    on me?

    Both made me smile and the imagining you captured in such a short space was vivid. Well written.
    Nancy

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    1. Thank you, Nancy. Glad you like:)

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  8. Hello again Adura,
    Reading this a second time, I see there is a lot more to this poem. The last three lines are a little 'tricky'. I'm not sure I understand them. It almost sounds like the narrator/poet has loved and left this man. Learnt a lesson. But I don't think that is what is meant here. I think it means that loving this man, has taught her something about herself; who she it.
    Maybe.

    Best wishes,
    Anna

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    1. You are absolutely right, Anna!
      I'm so glad you got the complex not so obvious interpretation to this poem. I think Denise probably got it too as she spoke of a deeper meaning.

      On the surface, the poem speaks of romantic love and celebrates it. But on reflection and a closer examination of the words, one would read something deeper about lessons learnt and a rebirth leading to true love. That's why I included the image of a black rose on the post. It is a complex poem though written very simply. I gave a lot of thought to the words used so that I could retain a number of interpretations and not give the game away. The poem (from my own thoughts as written) actually deals with three stages of love.

      Thanks for sharing your interpretation and the opportunity to talk about it. It is tricky to say the least and you were spot on.

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    2. Hi Adura,
      Thank you so much for commenting on this! I'm back to read your poem once more. I'm glad that my 'gut-feeling' was right about your poem having a deeper meaning.

      Your poems often have several levels of meaning. Love in real life is often not that simple, so why not show this in poetry?

      Well done!

      Best wishes,
      Anna
      oxox

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  9. My friend Adura,
    I am never disappointed when I come here.
    Loved the rhythm and flow of this. The ending is profound.
    Nicely done!
    Thanks for sharing.

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  10. I love you because you taught me the greatest love of all
    It took a man like you to know what not to love
    I had to love you to find what it took to love me... esp. your last stanza left me breathless..this is wonderful and deep...

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    1. Thanks Claudia for your lovely comments.
      Means a lot.

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  11. Hi Adura,

    Oh so love this: life's lesson learned through the power of perfect love! Beautiful prose and thought provoking... ;)

    best
    F

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    1. Hi Francine,

      Nice to see you. It's been a while.
      Loving your take on this.

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  12. Oh no - blogger killed off my comment! What I tried to say was...
    I really enjoyed this- I read it out loud - it deserves to be shared with a room rather than read quietly - do you ever perform your work?
    Laura x

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    1. Sorry about blogger's antics, Laura.

      It gladdens my heart that you read it out loud. Yes, I 'performed' my work once in London - last year. (Though it was more reading, not performing). Other people have talked about my performing being a good idea. Maybe I should work on my performance skills, lol.

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  13. I like the pictures you drew here and the sentiments expressed.

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  14. I love this especially the last line
    "I had to love you to find what it took to love me"
    It really resonates with me and this theme.
    Lovely poem, Adura.

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  15. Beautiful poem and a gorgeous picture too! ;)

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  16. Very thought provoking with great resonance.

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  17. Thanks Joy, Kiru, Talei and Madeleine.

    I'm still working at being confident - as far as my writing goes...So your comments mean a lot. Thank you.

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  18. great closing on this adura...and being that fish in the sea is highly over rated...that did not get the point..i def would not want to be that one either...

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  19. Great ending to this....great capture.

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  20. I can relate to the sweet sentiment in this, what my life would be like without my man's love.

    I really like it here!!

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  21. Beautifully written, Adura. I agree. The ending sums it up nicely.

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